I have been working my way through checking the Kasem translation of Isaiah for a few weeks now. The repetitive nature of Hebrew poetic form presents a challenge. Pairs of lines tend to repeat the same information, with some variation in the words used, sometimes pairing a positive with an equivalent negative, or mirror image; sometimes with the second line expanding or strengthening the idea contained in the first line. This has been described as rhyming ideas, rather than the rhyming of sounds, which we are more used to.
The challenge is that people not familiar with Hebrew poetry (such as most Kasena) will want to read a different meaning into successive lines–why say the same thing twice over? Here is an example from the English Standard Version:
… for the LORD will go before you,and the God of Israel will be your rear guard.Isaiah 52:12b (ESV)
The LORD your God will lead you and protect you on every side. (GNB)
For the LORD will go ahead of you, and the God of Israel will protect you from behind. (NLT)
… for the LORD will go before you, your rearguard will be Israel’s God. (Revised English Bible)
Once again, we are faced with the dilemma in translation between maintaining the dynamism of the poetic form (or at least a hint of it), and spelling out the meaning clearly in a rather flat and uninteresting way. A more ambitious alternative may be to research equivalent poetic forms in the target language and mould the text into those patterns, but this is moving further away from the cultural setting of the original.
One more example: Isaiah often interchanges the names Jacob and Israel in successive lines, referring in each case to the same people of God. The names refer to the founding ancestor of the nation, whose name was changed from Jacob to Israel. I count 23 instances in the book of Isaiah where the two names are used in parallel, but with essentially no difference in who they refer to. Here is an example:
But now thus says the LORD,
he who created you, O Jacob,he who formed you, O Israel:Isaiah 43:1a (ESV)
Offspring of Jacob who are the Israel people,God has created you and brought you into being.